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Hi! TheNewHero, your reviewer for today, supports writing! Hi, NewHero here to review: Firstly let me say that this was a very interesting story. But (I don't know your story ...

I don't know if you can review fanfics but... I'll try! NewHero here, I'm a Max fan. Okay first thing, the whole idea was great. Second thing, Max narration was ...

TheNewHero is here! Review time: I suggest you read what the above reviewers have to say because I didn't notice much of those things. Alright, first I agree with Narnia ...

I am TheNewHero, your reviewer. Let's get on shall we? First thing: You start out saying you hate being the one and then ask people to stop hating on you. ...

Hey there, Hero here for your review. Now I'm not a real poet kind of guy so don't worry if I contradicted what made sense in your mind. Here we ...

Okay look, judging by the amount of reviews you've gotten, everyone loves your poem. So if I were you... I'd redo it, much, much better and pray for gold stars. ...

Your title is the school, I felt that near the end. You might want to put a bit more of The School in this prologue. A better title: My Life: ...

Nice, although I'm not a poet. Hey, just trying to get you reviews you know, takes one to start a chain. Anyway, Firstly the Title makes you think "Who's doing ...

I can understand why you'd be eager for a review. If I had written something this good I'd want it to be better! :mrgreen: Nice story though. I think one ...

Very good. I don't really knwo much about poetry but shoot, I'll try anyway: Umm... maybe you should make it a rhyming poem? I don't know I just kept calling ...

Need a Hero? Need a Review? I'm Hiro... Okay let's do this: The first two lines are cool but... Wind whips at my hair furiously,Creating a witch-like pose around my ...

Good plot. To answer your question directly, no it's not a good way to write: present tense. Near the end you said I am looking at that card now, as ...

Hmm... I could feel the potential but you couldn't hook me. However you managed to draw out a rough outline of what I think your story is going to be ...

Very Funny story and touching at the end. I read through your story again and didn't find anything to correct, well done. Well nothing that I should be correcting just ...