Loller65

The one of the reasons FGM is so controversial is that some people believe it breaks a moral law of the universe, like don’t steal, don’t commit rape, don’t murder ...

This was nice. I think I preferred the first poem to the second one. About looking on the bright side. It's nice and positive. I don't really have anything to ...

Well, on the whole, I thought this was good. The grammar was decent, the vocabulary was good, and the plot was okay. However. my major major major problem with this ...

Well, uh...that was awesome. I mean...that was so awesome. I adored it. I only have one nitpick with it. I loved the thing he had going with Crow and I ...

Here as requested! For starters, I didn't like the paragraphs. Doesn't hurt the story, just sort of weird to me. The name Jakil sounds like a man's name. Didn't like ...

This is not bad, not bad at all. "You’ll get lost. Not to mention-" lol'd at that bit. I didn't think it was as creepy as everyone else did. See...I ...

Here as requested. So. I really loved this. I think it very effectively captures the idiocy of the attitudes held by some people. I have only two things to say ...

Here as requested. :) Okay. Let's get to it. In my eyes you can see haughtiness, In my words, notice the unduly hate? Morbidity is my best friend, I carry ...

I really liked this. I was chuckling the whole way through. Oh, dear, that sounded bad. I was chuckling because it reminds me of a guy in our theatre troupe ...

The high school couple, They think they’re in love They kiss all day and night And hold hands down the hall They’re stuck in their own world Until it eventually ...

Well, for starters, grammar and spelling wasn't too much of an issue, so congratulations. Now, for the rest. The whole story, to me, felt too vague to have any impact. ...

Feelings are like .... (I feel those periods could have been taken out and had the passage be just as effective) political leaders. (humorous) You never know what they will ...

Cold, I stand alone. The edge is as close as I get To you. I don’t understand this. I don’t know how to be there, How to say it, How ...

I think this one kind of looses its touch after the sixth or seventh stanzas so if you have any tips then PLEASE help!! BTW you can check out my ...

My top 5 books as of right now: 1.The Bible 2.I dreamed of Africa by Kuki Gallmann 3.The Shack by William P. Young 4.Harry Potter by J.K. Rowling 5.Girls of ...