Llamahorse

Hey Phoenix! I looove this! This is probably the first anti-christian poem I have read and it's awesome! It's great how you make this negative atmosphere and you clearly aren't ...

Hi there polinkacreations, Llamahorse to review. Your style is wonderful, it just swept me away! I think you made a great choice not to give to much information away and ...

I completely agree with umaima's suggestions and have my own to add. The punctuation of a poem is very important, for it illustrates the dramatic pauses and stresses. This is ...

hey there bandgeek! This is a very interesting topic you have chosen here, about love and broken hearts. But you could make it more dramatic by adding punctuation, so that ...

heya I simply LOVE this poem But speaking about the mood and feeling ( since I'm no master at grammar, punctuation etc..), there is a clash. At the beginning you ...

Wow, What an interesting dream you had. I just have two things to say about it:he When the character arrived at the swap meet i could tell that this was ...

hi! I like the way you show the complexity of your subject unraveling the words. But it is just strange to read it out loud. The first stanzas are short ...

Wow, powerful images. But in my opinion you are moving too fast, and not giving the reader enough time to drift from one scene to the other. In the last ...

I think you started very well in the first stanza describing the beginning of a new day. But then you turned everything into a complicated description of the weather (One ...