LittlePetRock

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I'm LittlePetRock, but feel free to call me LPR. 8) Hmm... well. This poem needs a bit of work. You tried to hard to rhyme, ...

Hi there! Not going to lie, this poem is nice, but deathly boring. It doesn't 'wow' me. At all. It is very unclear. I'm with Firestarter. I fail to see ...

I agree with both Firestarter and Nate. These are lines we've all heard before. A rather monotonous, collaboration of phrases that are overused and severely boring. This line bugs the ...

I love this. Not as much as chapter one. But it is well wrote, though it does not really further the novel. I let out a shriek that permeated through ...

Hi there! LPR at you request! Oooh. Rocky likes. Muchly! I adore the way you describe the scene, without it sounding like a total information dump. Your use of adjectives ...

Hi there! I'm LPR and I've come to review! Mwaha! 8) Wow. I can totally relate to this poem! (Except I finally told him, but that is another story) ;) ...

Ahhahaha! This made me laugh! Sadly, it's not really poetry. But it did make my day brighter. I like the unconventionalness and randomness of it. Well done! ~LPR

Well let's see. I totally SUCK at reviewing poems. But I really like this poem, because it's something I think we all can relate to in some way. Sparkling teeth ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I hope you fall in love with this website as much as I have. I like this story, but they are quite a few mistakes ...

Hey there! I still like this story, however (nitpick time): It seems incomplete to me also. I think you need to add more emotion to your MC, she seems dry ...

Hey there! So, I like kinda the 'Sci-Fi' feel to this story it freshens things up! The small sickroom they had placed me is small, This doesn't read so smoothly... ...

Wow Olli, I'm impressed! 1. It is a little bit vague, but if you want something that makes the reader think hard, this is it. 2. No one can stop ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! Nit picks: Paragraph, paragraph, paragraph! Separate it out a bit. It is really confusing reading it all garbled together. Capitalize them I's and names. :) ...

Hello, Welcome to YWS! I'm LittlePetRock (duh) but everyone calls me Rocky or LPR. I shall be your reviewer for today! :D Nit picks: It all read in one huge ...

Hello there! One quick grammar mistake to point out: “Everyone changes as they grow.” h e explains. Other than that, I really liked your story. But you need to add ...