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Re: Elephants have Wrinkles
This is really interesting, it just has no stakes. Like, I'm not sure why it was written or why I should listen. It seems very factual (ex. "Elephants have wrinkles") ...
Feb 5, 2021 -
Re: Black Lives Matter
Hello! My name's Anna and I was really drawn to your piece. I'm passionate about BLM and often want to write about it, only I don't know what. So great ...
Feb 5, 2021 -
Re: How Do You Plead: 12.1
Your writing feels very real, very in the moment, so good job. The dialogue was all believable, which can sometimes be a feat when writing with many characters. But they ...
Jul 6, 2020 -
Re: The Quest for Fire - Frozen Past - Chapter Twenty
I love your imagery here! Your writing is very vivid, without being fluff. I love the word choice, the metaphors, all of it. I'm a huge metaphor writer myself, so ...
Jul 6, 2020 -
Re: Let's live today!
I really like the repetition of "Let's live today." It really enhances the message of the piece and what you're trying to say. I especially like the third stanza, because ...
May 30, 2020 -
Re: He did it on purpose
I like the point of view of this story. It reads very thoughtful and purposeful. It is, however, a little hard to read with no paragraphs. Big suggestion: make every ...
May 30, 2020 -
Re: How Do You Plead: 4.1
I can't explain it, but change your whole story to present tense. Some stories feel right in past/present, but yours is meant to be in present tense — I can ...
Dec 2, 2019 -
Re: Chapter One
For the most part, you write actively, but there are a few key sentences that are passive and it totally ruins the impact they could have. Sentences that seem pretty ...
Dec 2, 2019 -
Re: at the funeral
I've just recently gotten into poetry, so I'm not a pro by any means, but I am taking a university class on it right now so I thought I'd try ...
Oct 2, 2017 -
Re: Away--Chapter 5
Hey, Anna here for a review! So I haven't read any of the chapters before this one, so forgive me if I get something wrong, but here we go. So ...
Mar 21, 2017 -
Re: Pseyechia; Chapter 1.4: A News Story (Edited)
Hello, Anna Rae here for a reciew! (To be completely honest, I'm exhausted, so I apologize in advance if none of this review makes sense. I'm trying to be helpful ...
Oct 1, 2016 -
Re: How the Marigold Lost It's Sun: Ch 4
Hello, there! Anna Rae here to do a review :) And I should probably say that I haven't read any of the previous chapters to this, so my apologies if ...
Jul 25, 2016 -
Re: I didn't know- NaNoWriMo project 2015 - Chapter 6
'Ello, love, Anna Rae here to do a review. And I'm not even brittish so I don't know why I started like that. But without further adieu, let's get rolling. ...
Jul 25, 2016 -
Re: Untitled Novel : [Chapter 7 : If You're Leaving and No One's Home]
Hello. Anna here for a critique. So I haven't read any of the previous chapters, so I can blame some of my confusion on that, but overall, I was confused ...
Apr 19, 2016 -
Re: Tryal's Curse 7.1
Hi! Here to review your story :) I haven't read anything in the story before, so I'm sorry if I say things wrong or what I say doesn't make sense. ...
Dec 30, 2015
