LilySoulMahon

I like this piece, short and sweet and straight to the point. The structure of it is well done aswell, it gives a small space of time to review each ...

I do like this. But I found it hard to follow and it a little muddled. I am at a wonder of what was actually happening and what this was ...

I did enjoy this, however, I would of liked it to flow a little more as I found it hard to get into and get the feeling of. The imagery ...

I love this, its structure and rhythm is fantastic and kept me reading to the end. Plus believe me when I say you have written what I have imagined happening ...

I really like this, its a good idea and well written. Though I do feel like a little bit more emotional detail is needed and just a little more description ...

I really loved this and can seriously imagine it being sung. I think the structure is correct, for as you said, being sung slow. It makes me smile at the ...

You really do have a talent for poetry. This is a really strong piece giving more powerful imagery and a great sense of feeling. It really took me in, though ...

I really like this, its a strong piece and gives a great deal of detailed imagery. I could really imagine what was being said. It did confused me slightly nearing ...

Wow, just wow. I really love this. Its seriously something I would read, it captured me from the start. Though I do feel like it could be a little longer ...

This is a confusing yet powerful piece, its strong imagery kept me interested but I found it hard to follow to begin with. hounds of hell for gases and rocks ...

I like this, simple yet descriptive. Though I think it could be stronger as a longer piece of poetry as I would of liked to of read more. I have ...

You certainly have real talent for poetry. Each piece has its inviduality and captures you're mind. I find this one makes me smile and recall past memories, its got good ...

I like this and find the imagery to be quite strong. Though with the first few lines I found it hard to capture me but after that I found myself ...

I liked this, made me smile and gave me a idea of the emotion you we're feeling while writing this. The only thing that it bugging me is: that we ...

I liked this, short and sweet :) Though i'd of liked to read a little more it was something that made me smile and a little detail if expanded would ...