LilyPhelen

So first off your very funny, and imaginative. I like how you made this scene, and it was very whimsical. I believe that my favorite part is when she asks ...

I see that you enjoy rhyming in you poems, I just feel as if the line "because on my world for the sweet and the sour and the power there ...

This is a super emotional heart tugging piece. It makes me feel the narrator's pain, and I believe you conveyed the emotions very well. I like your use of fragment ...

This seems like part of a rap, which would be classified as poetry. Congratulations on successfully making me afraid of you! (I'm just kidding). however, I like your use of ...

This is such a lovely poem, and I can tell there is a lot of heart in this piece. Your use of repetition with memories really shows that the memory ...

This is a lovely poem! your use of rhyme and imagery really help the poem flow, and I truly enjoy your theme of not being consumed by man's desires or ...

I really enjoyed this. It is very emotional, and rightfully so. You capture the death of a loved one from a younger perspective very well. I also enjoyed how you ...

I really like the set up that you have here. this is a great start to what could be an amazing narrative, but if your looking for more of a ...