Lilicia

Thanks for the advice guys! :)

Thanks so much for the reviews! They were helpful (:

I also loved this book! It was beautifully written. I haven't read any of her other books yet, but I'm planning to.

Hello! Me again. I'm happy you took my advice! You've rewritten some parts well; the emotions are a lot more defined. I loved this: "Yet nobody knows that his tummy ...

Thanks for the feedback! :)

Thanks for the reviews!! I don't often write poems, and it's good to have tips on how to improve. ~Lilicia

Thanks for the reviews, they helped a lot! I will correct it soon. I might post more of this, when I have more time - and that's a good point ...

Thanks for the feedback! I see what you mean about the descriptions, Snoink - I'll fix that soon :)

Hey! Glad I could help, and yes - Nancy does seem much more realistic now. :) I think the ending's great. ~Lilicia

Thank you for all the helpful comments :) I've put the next chapter up, and, if you're interested, reviews would be useful! :D

Thanks everyone! :D I'm writing the next part, and should put it up somtime in the next week!

This is really good. I couldn't see any mistakes, so well done. Keep on writing! :D

You're not a fail! Don't ever put yourself down like that. Sometimes I get really upset because I think that the reviews I get are too critical, that people can ...

Thanks everyone! This really helped :D I've made the next installment (Missing chapter 2) and it needs some serious editing! Please help!!!! :)

This was amazing! Your characters seemed so real, I could just picture them through Sonora's eyes. Your descriptions are beautiful. I hope you're going to continue with this story! I ...