Lil_Pau

OK thanks for the advice! :)

Lol. This really made me laugh. This is really...outrageously unique. Good job! 1 gold star for you! :)

Wow, I like this. It's a nice, refreshing read. There are no mistakes for me to point out. Good job, and keep it up! ^^

Hm...this was short, but at the same time, it was quite nice. I think if it was a little longer, it could have been better. Anyway, this wasn't bad at ...

Thanks for the review!

Hey, is this really your first poem? It was really good, really enjoyable. Good job on the choice of words and structure. The rhyme was OK, quite good. I have ...

Wow. Such an enjoyable read. :)

OK thanks for the review!

Thanks for reviewing, and also the advice! I'll keep that in mind...:)

Oh this was really touching. I loved it, especially the last part. It was so sad... Keep writing!

Wow. I have to agree that the imagery is good. But it's kinda unclear of what you're trying to it something to do with life? Overall, it was good. Great ...

Wow. I love this poem...just as Jay commented, it was creative, clever and is full of imagery. Good work! A true heart of a true businessman....^^ Keep it up!

Nice! Quite short, but I say it's quite good, better than the other one 'Fall'. Oh yes, try writing something longer perhaps. You do have potential to write! Cheers

Wow...very nice and soothing. Perfect for a lullaby. I love this. It made me feel calm and relaxed while reading this. Good work! Keep it up! :)

A short but enyable read. I love this!