Lil_Pau

Hiya! As usual, you did a good job here. It was simple and straight to the point, which was what I liked about this poem. Like niteowl mentioned, the rhyming's ...

Hey Knightly! I enjoyed this poem. It was simple, straight to the point, but done in a warm and mellow way. I can't find any major error to point out ...

Wow. This is short, but a very good read. It's very meaningful and metaphorical. Since it is a short poem, I cannot find much to nitpick on. However, there is ...

O.o Wow. Great job. I really love the imagery, the tone and the message of this poem. I was simply blown away after finishing it, and I read it at ...

Hey zaneman! Welcome to YWS! Firstly, be sure that you have posted 2 reviews before posting a new piece of work. Now, back to the poem... Honestly, I didn't like ...

Hi angels-symphony! I'd like to review your poem. :D Hopefully the point got across in this one. It was another one of those impulse-poems. I'm having a lot of those ...

Hi there! I actually liked this poem. It was simple, but straight to the point, and had a whimsical feeling. What's more, I'm glad that it was a from the ...

Wow, not bad! I like your use of a 'china doll' as a metaphor. Quite unique. :) You broke me like a china doll, Released me from your clutch. Watched ...

Hiya there! *Just a reminder first - before posting any piece of work, you should at least make TWO reviews. YWS rules and regulations. :) So...back to the poem... To ...

I really liked this piece. Like Penelope mentioned above, it was written with nice imagery and for me, it was a mellow read. Just one thing: She rushed through the ...

I know you feel terribly sad about the fact that your love of your life is moving far away, but I have to agree with bubblewrapped's view. It's a typical ...

Wow! This is one piece that blew me away. I love the rich Shakespearean language and the poem's structure. As most of everyone had said above, this was brilliantly written. ...

Hi there! Dancing in eternity, Drowning in seretiny, Don't you mean "drowning in serenity?" Falling into open minded dreams. Sunless days, Moonless nights, Breaking dawn with frightened screams. Hours

It's rather short, but I liked the message you were trying to convey. I think you should try to improve the ending, maybe extend it, because just putting "somewhat misplaced" ...

Wow, Knightly, you did great with this! I love the imagery, the choice of words and the flow. I liked the way the poem started, from beginning to end, and ...