Liaya

Thanks for the feedback! I'll always keep writing! :)

Thanks so much for your review! I'm glad you liked it. I'll take a look at the punctuation.

Thanks for your comment!

Thanks for your comments! I'll consider putting in rhymes. I appreciate your feedback a lot!

Thanks so much for your comments! It's good to know how you feel about the rhythm. And...I don't think I could stop writing even if I wanted to! Thanks again ...

I've only got a couple of short stories so far, and they're both about ghosts, lol. This is actually supposed to be the start of a short story, which I ...

Haha, I had the same image! Lol. Yes, adding that she's riding a horse might be a very good idea.

Thanks for your suggestions! They're great and I really appreciate it.

Hmm...true...but I want it to be long enough that Bryn's whole life seems to fall apart and to make it really strange that she knows so much. Hmm...what to do.... ...

Thank you for the suggestion, you're absolutely right. I added a couple of sentences mentioning him. Thanks for reading!

This is beautiful as ever. I had to leave halfway through the poem because I was starting to cry. The emotion is so poignant. My brother is in the Marines ...

Hey, hang in there. You're precious and you're going to find people who think the same around you. The poem is very good; thank you for sharing it. That's very ...

Thanks so much for your feedback, RyiaGreene! I really appreciate them.

Thank you! :)

Hmm...well, for example, try comparing God or some of your feelings to something you can describe. Similes and metaphors are important in poetry and I think they'd make this one ...