Young Writers Society

You're a very brave soul.

Rhyming constantly would be something that would make this poem even more wonderful, but make sure the words fit.

Your description of cutting is very beautiful. The giving herself love and care bit is so emotionally beautiful too, sorry i'd find another word, but beautiful seems to fit best.

Because you know what? You're beautiful, clever and artistic, you've put pen to paper which I find very difficult to do when my depression is more severe. So amazing work!

Little one, you can always message me for help or support, I'm someone with severe depression and psychosis and I know what you're going through.

~ Lee

Your courage in posting this is genuinely inspiring. It has made me think about posting about some of my more personal writing.

I just wanted to say some things about the poem, which I do think you should be proud of.
I think that if you are going to use rhyming, you should use it consistently, because the parts in which you rhymed flowed beautifully and read really well. It's a strength you should capitalize on.

I also feel like you could write in some longer lines, because it can become an obstacle to flow and clarity when you have a lot of short lines.

Aside from all of that, I just want to say that you are so incredibly worthwhile, and deserving of all the love in the world. I hope you're doing ok, and if you aren't, I hope you seek help. I've been there too, I'm a long time self harmer, and recently spent a lot of time in psychiatric hospitals. So I know how brave it is for you to post this.
So much Love.

Hey, hang in there. You're precious and you're going to find people who think the same around you. The poem is very good; thank you for sharing it. That's very brave of you because this is so personal. This isn't a review, though. This isn't about the poem, it's about you.

I understand depression. It's something I've struggled with a lot in my life. I know some days it may be the hardest thing you do and it might feel super-fake and useless, but keep smiling. Once you've reached the step where you can share what's happened or what your feelings are (like you are now) I think that's about the best thing you can do. One by one, I think they'll help melt away all the hurt and sorrow and whatever else you may be feeling.

At least, it did for me. No one had any idea I was depressed, and that wasn't good because then no one could help me. But once I opened up, just smiling and finding nuggets of optimism probably saved my life. I wish you the best of luck.

Hi! I just wanted to tell you that I really like this poem. Also I'm really proud of you for sharing a poem with such deep meaning behind it. I struggle with depression an also and I used to self harm (about a month clean). I know it's hard to stop once you start but if you ever need anyone to talk to or extra motivation or something like that I'm here. Again I love this poem it was wonderful. c:

I feel it's not right to judge people until you judge yourself so I'm not going to judge you and I understand how you could turn to the knife instead of suicide I personally...tried to kill myself by taking a lot of pills...and that didn't work out because my little sister ratted me out and I'm not really glad that she did...but now I have my poetry so I guess I'm better then I was anyways I think your poem is great it's filled with emotion and struggle so it was good to me because that's what I like in a poem I like how it tells your story as well because it gives the reader some idea of what life is like through your eyes thanks for giving my mind something to think about tonight ^^ your talented keep writing! Oh and your poem is wonderful sorry I couldn't write more but my internet keeps going off so I would if I could...have a nice day/night