Liaya

Righto! Well, I think this is an impressive beginning to a story. It's remarkable how well you've portrayed the characters so far and I think that is very important. Your ...

Right! Once again, I find this idea intriguing, and it just got better! My complaints are basically the same as with your first chapter; it's hard to keep track of ...

I enjoyed this! I think it's a fun idea, and it's further complicated by the toy gun turning into a real one. Besides that, I enjoy airsoft, so it was ...

I think this poem is very sad but very beautiful and I love that you wrote it to remember these people. Thank you! It's so honest and untainted. I think ...

First off, let me tell you, I love your poem! I think you've got something really great started here. Your words and imagery are great, and I love your term ...

Okay, I'm curious! The title, "A Prayer," suggests that you're wishing for something or being grateful for something, but then the poem is so short and you're talking about a ...

This is gorgeous! I'm sure your father loved this. I think the story behind it adds a lot to the poem too, so thank you for sharing! The imagery is ...

I love this! It's a great little spiel about flying and birds. I'm sure nearly everyone has dreamed of flying. I've wished I had wings since I was little! I ...

I think this is beautiful! I don't know if you meant it to when you wrote it, but it sounds like someone who wants to build a home with someone ...

This is yet another amazing piece! Thank you so much for posting it. I'm amazed by your insight; I think you must be blessed with an old soul. It made ...

I think this is great! I only noticed one thing I'd change; "who's shy to talk to us" would sound better (in my opinion) if it were "who's too shy ...

I really like this! It's a sweet, pretty little poem and it has some really nice imagery. I love how you describe the clouds and sky and then move on ...

I want to know more! I really enjoyed this. You had some great imagery going on and I liked how much personality you put in Sophie in such a short ...

I really like this, in spite of the fact that I adore storms! I did notice one thing in the second line. "a" should be "an." Other than that, it ...

I really like this! It's got great rhythm and the words have kind of an upward beat that make them really easy to relate too. I'm sure there are many ...