Here to review again!
This is interesting. At first I thought it was going to take a deep but sad turn with the shadow seeming to be the only one the narrator can identify with, her only friend. Then it just seemed to be describing the shadow with no end point to the description, it just sort of was. And then at the end it got sort of joking and there was stalking mentioned. So with all this mixed together I'm not sure what the actual purpose/direction of this was so that should be made more clear.
He might be my only friend
Who understands me better than anyone else.
Like I said above, I like the direction this was heading. It's a solid concept and I think the poem should move forward with this theme in mind.
Trying to scare me in the mirror?
Generally, I thought this was about shadows, which doesn't make too much sense with this line. Mirrors are for reflections which are also a projection of ourselves, but the mirror line just doesn't ft in the poem as well as another line could. Like saying your afraid to step on him?
And I’m sure you know you he is
This is a bit awkward and could be phrased more clearly.
Basically what I mentioned in the beginning about it being all jumpy. Again, not a bad start, but I think it should be refined and centered around a more specific idea. Okay bye!
Points: 9790
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