Leja

Hilarious, as always, Claudette. I love reading your satires. I am wondering, what dastardly deeds the rest of the group is up to when they're not avoiding SPEW and CCF ...

The description was pretty; the only trouble I found with it was it seemed very "The [noun] [verb]" for a while, and that got difficult to read after a while.

I think this goes with the adjective thing... there were so many words, and I didn't see how they all connected, and it was like I was reading in another ...

I was wondering if a mod could move this to Other Fiction? I think that might be a better category. Sorry I mis-posted in the first place. Thank you, Amelia

Love the musicality of it ^_^ That being said, I wish there was more than just the feeling of a crescendo/decrescendo; I wish you'd taken us through a whole piece/ ...

I like the sing-song-ness, though the rhythme is a bit clumsy some times. It's cute, but other than being a poem for your girlfriend, I don't think it really accomplishes ...

The girl of his dreams smelled like fruit, but did she taste like it too? She came over for a drink, and he started to cook some stew. It's this ...

Hey, haven't seen you around for a while. I felt like there should have been a little more connection emotionally with the people in the poem. It made me (for ...

Dialogue tags are always helpful. Even the basic he said/she said after someone speaks for clarification. Though be careful you don't go overboard ^_^

Just two lines... yet they do work. When I saw it on the main page, I was initially looking for more of it ^_^

Thanks Imp! I want to bring back the baking soda eyes (they made me laugh when I wrote it) but I have to think a little longer about where to ...

Yes, it is typical and cliche; I disagree with nothing that you have said here (you're right about the blonde/brunette thing).

Makes sense to me, too. Short. I like. My only critique is that you began in kind of a flowing, elegant style, then ended in choppy, mixed up words.

I was a bit torn about how to use the parentheses at first.... I decided for them to be like this so that however you read it, what I want ...

I'm assuming that this isn't actually the poem, but a "poem has been deleted" message?