Leja

So now that I've stopped going in a hundred different directions... Yay for version 3! yes? Is it at least getting better each time? Thank you, Fand and Claudette for ...

Kaz: first off, mad cool hidden message. Secondly, I know!! *sad*

First of all, a BIG hug to Snoink! So... better? I think so, but then again, I'm neck deep in it, so can't look at it too too objectively. Here ...

I think you should just get rid of the line breaks, as it already reads like a story. Honestly, in this format, I couldn't make it past the second stanza.

It almost sounds like you're just writing because someone told you to. I...don't have anything new to say. For once. I echo STRONGLY the people who've posted previously; listen to ...

I thought it was pretty funny, actually. Or maybe my sense of humour's just off since I'll laugh at almost anything. Seemed like one looong tangent, but that's part of ...

Story go bye bye?

Was anyone disappointed with the epilogue? I expected it to be more detailed about the lives of the survivors than that. I still have questions! Yeah, I don't think it ...

It's very... conversational. It almost seems informal, but maybe I just haven't read such a style for a while [sorry, I didn't intend to rhyme]. I usually associate that style ...

I don't even know if they merit a PG-13 rating yet. Here's what I found in a "Rules" sticky: If your poem or story may be unsuitable for younger readers, ...

*is not longer confused* :D

Just to spark discussion, it seems like it might be demeaning for Sabah to want Erik in the first place, though maybe less so if she isn't that public about ...

Here's the breathe/breath thing: I still can’t breath . This has happened to me so many times but I still can’t breath . He shushes me, and looks like he ...

love it, love it, love it.

EDIT: Hmm, so I've already reviewed, but I forgot that I had until the third paragraph or so (Gimmie a break; my memory does not span two whole months very ...