Leja

haha, LOVING the symphony allusion :wink: My only problem with it was there was a big, blatant block of exposition afterwards, beginning with "Ah, yes, have I mentioned it yet?". ...

Hehe, I wanted to twirl around while reading the first stanza; it seemed to lend itself to twirling ^_^ -on to a serious critique- Thankfully the dim echo of his ...

I felt like you could have used "Salem" more throughout the poem since it seems in the beginning and the end that it is important that these events happened in ...

The last two lines of the first stanza don't make sense in context with what comes before them... it's a phrase that seems like it should stand alone, but there ...

Ooh, I like it! (I had to look up villanelle first....and from my now-basic understanding of it, it looks like you did a good job form-wise). It was only one ...

I liked the first stanza, but the last line seemed wordy. In the second line of stanza two, the word "of" is used twice, and tripped me when I read ...

I found it enjoyable as well. Though there was one awkward phrase: "As a fearful blush darkens by ears" I'm not sure how a blush darkens by ears. Also, be ...

So little connects from one movie to the next, it sounds like the movies have simply been summerized it fit the stanzas. If you were to do this again, try ...

“Wilted flowers dangling lifelessly from their roots, scorched vines were peeling off the crumbling buildings standing in a courtyard of ashes” Were the wilted flowers on the vines? The “their�

I liked it; I like how each stanza began with "Little birdie". I don't know if you intended this, but I imagined someone reading it in a sad voice, like ...

"You might say that I knew it as well as my own house, my bedroom. " This sentence was awkward; it might be better if you cut out "my own ...

Wow, I've read 20 of these...though some only through school. I wouldn't have finished the Scarlet Letter if my midterm grade hadn't hinged on it. That being said, I also ...

I like the rewrite better than the original. I think that it flows better and that the spacing and line breaks are better. The middle is a little long for ...

It crushed him and drove the oxygen from his lungs, and pushed him further under the viscous filth that enveloped them both. there are alot of "and"s in this sentence. ...

I couldn't figure out what the last line of the first stanza had to do with the lines before it. I also wouldn't recommend so much punctuation, especially when it ...