Leahweird

This makes me want o read the rest of the novel. I hope you post some. The only critique I have is that it gets a little confusing regarding who ...

I was reading, and thinking "Well this is oddly written." I enjoyed it immensely, but I got to then end and had an epiphany. "Oh! It's a sonnet !." I ...

Three! Count them! Three! And ther's probably more out there! I suppose it's because fear is so iconic.I did an essay on that last year. I love the first two ...

Teehee. This is fun. I really like you food references. They really fit with what you trying to do. One thing though. . Her mouth was salivating like strawberry jelly ...

I'd like to start off by saying this is a really well written piece. Apparently it started out as an info dump, but i didn't get that at all. Actually ...

This is really powerful, and you’ve got a good mythology going on. I do have some notes though. For starters, you’ve given us your “Vampire mythology” straight. I don’t think ...

Wow this really is amsing, despite the lack of paragraph breaks. No one's comented on it, but there is an empty line after the shakespeare conversation that was most likely ...

This is eally good, but only as a prolouge. It's very speeck-like, but I'm sure that's intentional. My only real critique is that you say "The older of the two" ...

I was completly drawn in. YOu have a great style, and some of the imagry was fantatic. This gave me shivers. I noticed in the first paragrapgh that he looks ...

This stated out well, but you have major grammar and spelling issues. Most of them are probably typos, but you should check that out. Also, I don't really see how ...

This is wondefully written. It works well as an opening scene, becase it draw's the reader in. I hope, though, that you will work in some of the mechanics of ...