Layla

Kanen, forbidden love sucks ass huh?? Lol. But best friends like you and her usually get married or something in the end, so don't give up,okayy?? She'll wake up one ...

Hello! Layla here, and I'm going to review your poem and give you tips, then my opinion. Some days are good, Some days are bad, Somedays make you think about ...

Hello!! I'm Layla, I really like this. It's very unique actually. Okayy, on to the review. Uuum, despite the very powerful message in this poem, it's just a little bit ...

Hello! Layla here! First off, I love your theme. Secondly, this is awesome! There's no grammar corrections necessary. But the ending part was a little confusing when he asks her ...

Whatever. Even for a newbie, you're still good. Don't change anything, just make you're corrections for grammar. I know TheNewHero is just trying to be helpful, but leave it how ...

Hi. I'm Layla. I liked your Poem it was really cool, but I just want to point out a few things. In the first verse you go from describing in ...

I really really like this. I love the format you used for this and there aren't any grammar issues. But you kind of lost me on the story you're trying ...

I really like this. It kind of reminds me of Go Ask Alice and Crank . I would NEVER critisize your imagination.!! You're really good. Anyone has their own imagination, ...

It is a little choppy at some parts I have to admit. But it was still great. With each to parts that rhyme like this for instance. "How are you?" ...

I totally disagree with the other critics, I loved this. You should continue writing this. I just want to point out a few things. One pack of cigarettes awaited me ...

I really liked this, I really did. I love how you pieces the words together perfectly so we can know EXACTLY is going on with you and so we can ...

I love your work.!! Can I die too.?? I want my character to be Layla. I want my story to fit the theme of 'A Little Piece of Heaven by ...

Hi.! This is really good but why did you stop? You should more emotion into this. power,confidense you spelled confidence wrong Hun. Confidence is spelled with and s instead of ...

Hi I'm Layla.!! I'm just going to point out avfew things of my knowledge and others can finish for me. She was wondering if it was raining in victopia you ...

Okayy whenbi first started reading I was confused but I got it now. Lik at the very very end of the poem you shouldve put "but I did not cry" ...