power, confidense, spotlight i want it. Flashing lights all around me people wanting my picture i want it. to walk the runway, to wear the clothes, to be the model i want it.
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Hey there, Britt! Welcome to YWS!
This isn't so bad, but I think you should elaborate a little more, probably give us a bit more on setting and why she wants this, and possibly work on the structure of this just a little bit more. Also! The pronoun I should always be capitalized.
Keep writing.
June
Hi.! This is really good but why did you stop? You should more emotion into this.
you spelled confidence wrong Hun. Confidence is spelled with and s instead of a c. And the p in power should be capitalized.
Since this is a poem so it should be written in poem form Instead of It being all squished together like a paragraph. Review poems and see how others write their poetry, then rewrite this.
PM me for any questions.
<3;
Layla