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You're very welcome! I think all of those are great reasons for choosing Fay's sibling as the narrator. I don't even think they need to become A LOT more active, ...

Oh, I love that idea! When you can't use a life as a major threat, you can threaten everything else they hold dear xD

Ah, man, that's one of the toughest things about writing in first person pov for sure. I also have the tendency to overwrite when I don't know what is going ...

I love that! It might be difficult to get across in film, but I bet you could find a way! Good luck :)

Thanks so much for the review(s)! Your thoughts on the ending are super helpful! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Thanks a lot, Becca! Your feedback here will be super helpful when I go back to revise.

Thank you so much for the feedback! You're totally right about Georgia's reactions/the sense of urgency. Something to work on in draft 2!

Thanks for the review! :)

You must be young xD 30 isnt all that old or experienced! Though I'm not surprised or disappointed that she reads as younger. Thanks for the review! :)

Thanks for the review! :)

I think either one could work! Maybe try taking one of the chapters you've written already and rewrite it in 3rd person? So you can see how they each feel ...

I am 100% on board with this

It's possible I mistook this for *child* Kale again? But it's an older adult Kale? A Kale at some point prior to the first time we meet him in chapter ...

Ooh no no need to apologize! Going back, it makes more sense now based on previous chapters. But still maybe something to clarify a tad if/when you go back. Also ...

I totally feel writing just "a beginning"! The first draft of my current project had a first chapter that is now in the absolute middle of the book xD I ...