Lauren

A hauntingly beautiful story, Lilith! It's like one of the short stories from the 'Sun, Moon and Stars' book I had years ago. I'd love it if you had illustrated ...

Awh, you're too modest! It was wonderfully good. Wording = great. Lay-out = great. Idea = great. Imagery = perfect. One thing, though... you should consider the length of your ...

Hi there. The main thing I liked about this piece was the voice of the narrator. She sounded smart and contained and very aware of her surroundings and what they ...

Hi. This was interesting. Too much would have been long-winded, so I think you did the right amount. The ending was a slight anticlimax, if I'm honest - I wanted ...

This was good stuff, Lorraine. It kept me interested, anyhow... It was fun and fluffy; this, I know, was what you were going for. I think you did all right ...

Aw this was good. I love Border Collies (I have one - he's a Blue Merle). Like clograbby mentioned, you've got the innocence and naivete down to a tee. I ...

Hello! This is just a quick critique, but I'll try to be helpful... I thought the chat-room part was really well written. I expect some people would go overboard with ...

The long critiques are done... but I'll say my piece. I thought this was exciting and enticing, and you had a great range of sentence structure (yay for that). I ...

This was powerful, and like aforesaid, you should appreciate it. At first, dismissing the title, I thought this was going to be soppy drivel - I waited, prepared to wince... ...

This was lovely. It was touching and sweet and delicate and definitely not OTT. And, and... Although it was short, it hit the right notes, and I think any more ...

I liked this, too. I think it's a new and fresh idea - so kudos to you there. I think your dialogue was realistic (well, I don't know if 'realistic' ...

Hi, fallenangel. I must say, this was great. You wrote it with such delicacy, such a beautiful use and array of words. I love poetic stories. My favourite line was: ...

Hi there. I liked this a lot - it had a pleasant humour running all the way through it. I like the relationship between the king and queen - one ...

Hi, chocoholic! I don't know much about scripts either... but I'll give it a go. I liked it - it was fresh and fun, and also the dialogue was written ...

Hi. This was a bit short, put looked pretty proffesional and well-structured, in my opinion. I just don't like how short and snappy the sentences are - it prevents me ...