LadySpark

My huge critque for this poem is 'why?'. You're telling us the narrator is cutting for all these reasons, but you never really share. That creates a disconnect between the ...

Poem One- There's single fading photo, Of you at sixteen. This is a great intro. I love it and I want to keep it. After that, however, I feel the ...

Hello again! I'm here to review this too, since it's also in the green room. :) His room was unnaturally neat, or rather not dirty. This is redundant. Also, I ...

Considering I haven't read the rest of this short story, I'm just going to take this as a single standing piece and give you my opinions as best I can. ...

Hey darling. I don't usually review prose, so count yourself very lucky right now. more than a boy How is he more than a boy? (side note, your intro is ...

I heard you're begging for reviews. Ask and you shall receive. Fragment One- i had a panic attack on blue twilight . fifteen days ago, when the eleventh month began ...

Hey darling! the half decent sketches, hmmm, I'd rather this be 'half finished' instead, because then it'll be clear that the narrator actually never finishes them. No storage space is ...

hi rhett darling. I would add an 'as' after the last we on the first line. I tried it out and it flows just a tad bit better. Delete the ...

Okay hi. Several things caught me as I read your poem. 1. your terribly odd capitalization. It doesn't make sense, and frankly, makes your poem look amateur. You also use ...

Hey darling. yours, speckled and burnishing a mosaic rose. I feel like this would be more poignant if it was 'a speckled and burnished mosaic rose', not only does it ...

Hi darling. the spring that rain fell, diamonds pounding onto your head to the psychiatrist: changes in eating & sleeping patterns are signs of depression litter the sides of a ...

To put it nicely, I'm not sure what the point of this chapter is. Obviously, I haven't read the other chapters, but I have a pretty clear idea what this ...

I know i said to remind me this weekend but I started reading and I just couldn't resist reviewing it right away. Let's dance, darlin. However, she was not always ...

Hey there! Before I start, I'd like to say that I hope you figure out whatever's going on, and if you need to talk to someone--I'm here. I know I ...

Hi there! Okay, so first off I notice your rhyming scheme. I'm going to be completely honest when I say that personally, I don't like rhyming poetry. But objectively, this ...