LadyPurple

You're a tad too young for the site. Maybe you should wait till you're older to take on YWS. Then you'll have grew in your writing skills as well because ...

I see a few mistakes here. Like leaving an apostrophe out of "I'm" and not capitalizing the I when needed. I think there are a few moments where you could ...

Wow. Touching. I almost cried! Sooo much passiona and emotion was put in this piece and blah blah and such. You. Are. The. Best. Writer. In. The. World. :D

:p I like it. But you capitalize the first letter of each word and that kinda drives me nuts... You Want Me To Be You're Friend. Then You Want More ...

A light humming whispers in my ear as the old Polyphon cranks up. I was about to give up on it when a soft, melancholy tone whipped out against the ...

Nice. I liked this :) but one problem: "Your dead". The "your" should be "you're" because you're is you are and your is expressig possesion. So "you're dead" would be ...

I was going to go all out for this review but…It seemed like a lot of work. I like it when I have a lot of work to do in ...

Whoa. sad but a good lil poem....I loved it. You didn't capitalize the "I"s as much as you should have (somebody probably said that already though :P) but overall you ...

I'll take another approach and say that red is the mistakes. You have a few colon splices where semicolons go. But don't worry...I'm not too good with them myself... The ...

Red-spelling. Blue-punctuation. Green- capitalization. "Careful," urged Trisella. The tall blonde girl set her hands on her hips in a leader like fashion, and surveyed the old museum. Ne'car, one of ...

I see that others have pointed out certain things already and I don't think I'll push it anymore by pointing them out again... nice story, I must say. :) Very ...

Hmm. You're fairly new :D so I guess I'll go ahead and say welcome to YWS! Time to get cracking...I'll be nice. His happiness was short lived though due to ...

Heya, JM. It's me, LadyPurple again! About that grammar you mentioned, this is very a very cute story but in order for others to read it and understand you need ...

"Do you have a name love?" she asked me softly. You had a comma where it shouldn't have been. "Try and get some rest , Cecelia ," she told me ...

9:53 The time is upon me now, to know fate A figure in black shows at my door, the line (My heart is freezing still) Is drawn, only to be ...