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  • Short Story » Realistic, Horror
    Re: Within the Mind of Evil

    Hi! I liked it very much. I think it was an interesting read: to break into the villain's mind and to know that villains aren't always villains. Particularly interesting was ...

    Dec 31, 2018

  • Short Story » Fantasy, Science Fiction
    Re: "They are insane, my son!"

    Hello there! I liked this piece. A lot of sci-fi writers explore the theme "why aliens don't visit us." Therefore the theme you chose to write on is a very ...

    Jul 10, 2018

  • Short Story » Fantasy, General
    Re: Purple Wine

    Hi! I liked the story. It's a nice setting for a short. There are some things that confused me and then there are some things that made me think, which ...

    Jul 9, 2018

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: A reminder

    Hello there! I don't know much about the structure or rules of poetry, so I will restrict myself to commenting on the feel. I absolutely loved this poem. I think ...

    Jun 15, 2018

  • Short Story » Narrative, Dramatic
    Re: 3.

    Hello there! I liked it! Here are some suggestions I'd like to offer: There was this guy at the Starbucks I was staying at. I'm not sure why you used ...

    Jun 13, 2018

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Silver blade

    Hello there! I love this little piece that you have presented here. I love the description. The sentences are well constructed and easy to understand. You have chosen elegant words ...

    Jun 7, 2018

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: ​Aloft above a cloud an eagle flies

    Hello there! I love it. The poem describes the act of hunting from two perspectives: one who hunts for survival and the other who hunts for pleasure. The act of ...

    Jun 1, 2018

  • Poetry » Dramatic, Realistic
    Re: Groans: Genre Villanelle

    Hello there! What a wonderful poem. It truly resonates the pain of being alone. Somehow the poem can represent both a person who has aged and awaits nothing but death ...

    May 27, 2018

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Tutoring

    Hello there! I love stories that begin one way and end another way. I love the whole connect with carbon monoxide and the math/chemistry problem. And I also loved Michael's ...

    May 26, 2018

  • Short Story » Supernatural, Dramatic
    Re: An Old Photo and A Thief

    Hello there. It's a nice little story. However, I apologize, for I don't get what is happening. I'm not sure what the last line means. Perhaps the thief and the ...

    May 25, 2018

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: My Soul For You

    Hello there! I really like this poem. Since I don't have much knowledge about form and structure of poetry, I shall be commenting on the feel. I like this poem ...

    May 19, 2018

  • Novel / Chapter » Supernatural, Fantasy
    Re: Dragon's Fang (Prologue)

    Hi there! I like the premise of the story. This is a neat prologue. It is the classic good v/s evil scenario, with Angels and Demons in play. Reminds me ...

    May 18, 2018

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Can you really?

    Hello there. I loved it! I'm not good at poetry and I don't understand how it works, so you can go ahead and disregard what I'm about to suggest: All ...

    May 16, 2018

  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Romantic
    Re: Can they really fall in love? Chapter 1, Part 1

    Hello there! I don't see any problem concerned with grammar or spelling. The sentences are nicely constructed and are easy to understand. There are a few pointers I'd like to ...

    May 14, 2018

  • Short Story » Narrative, Dramatic
    Re: The Fly

    Hello there! Some suggestions: After truly realizing what I’d done. I collapsed and crawled back to the center of my room where I laid down and cried myself to sleep ...

    May 14, 2018

We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
— T.S. Eliot