LMJRayner

Hi Zackymas, I had real trouble reading this :/ the structure of the lines is too bumpy, if that makes sense, the words get caught in your mouth. I had ...

Hi NerdBird, I'm always a little wary when reading prologues, it always feels to me like an excuse to wack the reader with pages and pages of lore and descriptive ...

Hi Fallwolf, I liked this, I like poetry that is so clearly from the heart and isn't trying to be too clever or fancy. You're clearly passionate and that comes ...

Hi Vari, This one's a little hard to review because it's such a small excerpt. But it's surprisingly vivid. I very easily imagined the scene. There was a little confusion ...

Hi Iamawriter, This is titled chapter 1 but ends up feeling like a short story, beginning, middle and end are all there haha. If you plan to make this a ...

Hi Burninhell, Great start to a Sci Fi story, brings up a lot of questions, and the want to find out more is surprisingly strong, especially from a short chapter. ...

Hi Ace, It's hard to properly review poems because it all depends on whether the subject matter can connect with you, and I understand this piece very much. I love ...

Hi Angrynoodles, Intense stuff, but you really need to edit this bad boy, certain words and punctuation are completely missing from most of it. Just read through it again, but ...

Hi Angrynoodles, On to the second part :) I really like where this is going, nothing is going right and if it does there's consequences. I did however have trouble ...

Hi Angrynoodles, I'm reviewing this because I wanted to review your later episode that's in the green room so I figured it was best to start at the beginning. First ...

Hi TheSwordsman, This was really interesting, spoiler alert: I really liked the ending, the idea that he had been down there so long that he was losing his mind a ...

Hi Labrador, This was well written, as mentioned below this review, the flow needs work but it's nothing major. I think right off the bat though, it shouldn't have ended ...

Hi MialyNire, This is mental! :) Your complete disregard for structure and logical rhyming method is awesome. Usually something like this would put many people off but I like it. ...

Hi QueenAnne, here for a review. Reviewing the narrative rather than the actual structure of the piece. There are some errors in spelling and such though, form-from and he-me, and ...

Hi Morrigan, I loved the whole thing, you have grabbed the horns of style and meaning and thrown them to the ground becoming their master. Utilising single lines and lack ...