Kwantack

I can't get over how wonderfully written this is. It's definetely unlike anything I've ever seen, which is good! Your choice of words is fantastic and I really enjoyed reading ...

This was so much fun to read. I loved it! I think you did a wonderful job with this. Keep writing!

This is really good. I don't have much to say that others haven't, so...good job!!!! Keep writing!

Thanks all for comments. I'm glad you liked it.

This is fantastic! I love the flow. The only thing I can think of is that the majority of the lines are capatalized while two (or three, I forgot) are ...

This is interesting. As the other review said, punctuation should be added. I don't really understand it either, but maybe that's your goal with secret feelings and such. Either way, ...

This is very well done. The last part about the coffee cups just makes the poem!! You're an awesome poet! Good job and keep writing!

Like the others have said, grammar would improve this piece a lot, so would punctuation, but overall, I really like it's rhythm and flow. Keep writing!

Dude, I really liked this. Keep writing, it's waaaay better than my poetry.

Saddening! But it's very well written. The only thing I can say is that you might want to change Try to Trying in the first stanza. Great job! Thanks for ...

Great vocabulary with this!! It's very interesting, and it has a nice flow and rhythm to it. The punctuation rocks! Keep up the good work!

Amazing. Simply and absolutely amazing. I wish I could help, but I can't. It's beautiful. Well done, and keep writing!

I loved how everything lead to the next thing--it flowed very well. Just one thing; in the first paragraph, I think you mean breath because breathe is like "I can't ...

THAT WAS SO INTENSE!! Haha I loved it! I'm speechless right now--well done! If you want you can kill me (Allie) but I don't really care either way. Please keep ...

Its flow was very smooth--well done! In the first two lines, 'here' and 'here' may be a bit confusing for rhyming but it does work and if you like it ...