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Hi Hopkin! This seems a little bit like a journal, which could be a cool style for your writing. Is this a revised version of a beginning to one of ...
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Re: Scars
Hi cm57105! Your characters definitely have potential to be interesting; however, they didn’t really do anything in this piece. I want to know WHY he’s deformed, and what it’s like ...
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Re: Lust
Sushi and Noel! My favorite writing duo! I’ve just come from reading Sloth for the third time and Lust a second. I’m pleasantly surprised by the both of you. You ...
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Re: Are we ever free from anything?
How’s it going Helovedme? Guess what… ilovedyou, too. As your first short story, this is really good. I assume you were writing before this, because you've done really well here. ...
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Re: Last Winter
I really loved this ballad, Rosan. Though the gender is not specified, I’m assuming the perspective is of a girl and her brother. On the surface, you have a cold ...
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Re: Sloth
Hi Sushi and Noel! I really like that you spent about five days writing this, it shows. I don’t see a whole lot of dialogue-restricted short stories, but if done ...
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Re: Deleted
Never have I laughed so hard over a short story! The first portion of writing had me thinking you would gradually build upon the everyday interview – and to where, ...
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Re: Help.
Hi Madsy! I thought your story was interesting. Right from the beginning, you have a potentially fantastic opening paragraph by using a dramatic note to the reader. I would have ...
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Re: Fortuna Salad
Hi ingolmatt! My name is Kora, and I'd like to go over a few things I noticed about your writing. To begin with, I think Fortuna Salad is an awesomely ...
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