KookieKatie

Thanks for all your help, everyone! I've decided to submit it for the YWS journal. :)

No, the fire thing was NOT a reference to the bible. I'd completely forgotten about that story. I think the last time I heard that story was when I watched ...

I'd also like to add, in mild resentment, that you had so many notes that I had to open up a seperate window and pull up the actual review because ...

Yeah, after reading this I realize not a lot of this made sense. I'm revising my butt off here, and just hoping and hoping that it will turn out really ...

Oh my gosh, thank you guys so much. Loving the reviews, here. You guys really obviously took your time with your review, and I'm freaking ETERNALLY GRATEFUL for this. I'll ...

I was thinking the same thing when I posted it, but I'm still thinking about how to end it. I'll edit it as soon as I think of a good ...

While I thank everyone for commenting and the critique, I have to say I'm confused. I've recieved come very contradictory posts, including "You have too much emotion" and "You don't ...

Two with a different ending. I have to say, I don't like the random use of the word "paradiscal". I seems kinda random and not fitting with the dialogue. Great ...

Although most of what you say was true, that was EXTREMELY CREATIVE. And when I wrote it, I was hyper, and wrote it with ANOTHER hyper girl, so you get ...

I like this poem, it's intelligent, sad, and technical all at the same time. Kudos. Great work, keep writing! -KK

I wasn't trying to be descriptive, I wanted it to be vague, sad, and blunt. Most of my other poems are the exact opposite, so I wanted to try a ...

I think this is a sweet, sad poem, but I have to say that you lack a LOT technical-wise. Rhythm, rhyme, stuff like that. Sorry, I'm in a rush - ...

I've read some of your other stuff before, and it's not as bad as this. I'm pretty sure you were dumbing yourself down while writing this poem to make your ...

Great technique, emotion, and conveying of the storyline. Overall, a great poem. I would like to hear more contrast of the happiness / sadness. Expand the first few lines into ...

Really great!! The revisions helped. One little tick that's really bugging me is that second line in the second stanza. It's a syllable longer then it should be. (Sorry, I'm ...