Young Writers Society

This. Is so. Adorable. I just had to say that. Now for real commentary: I won’t promise you the moon, it’s not for me to give. very cute, and creative ...

First of all, take out the explanation. If you have to explain to your reader what the poem/story/essay/whatever it may be that you are writing is about for them to ...

Wow. This poem in really intense. You have such feeling in your words, it's really incredible. To improve this poem, I'd switch around the descriptive a bit and make it ...

this poem... well, here's my critique: Eat lunch Go to class study study what a drag (class and drag to not rhyme.) what is this day? (this doesn't fit with ...

I just have you say. you ave absolutely NO poetic technique. It's like you are using Dr. Suess as your template for writing. Right now, you are using all of ...

An interesting poem, but I have to say the ending left a little to be wanted. And not in a good way. Also, you don't have to put a comma ...

Um. This isn't emo. This is wannabe emo. Just saying. Also, the last line is NOT vaildated by artistic license, it's just stupid. The line "bread is my med" makes ...

Omigoshers. So sad... :( I have to say BRAVO for your amazing technique. It's a very typical poetry stanza construction, but you follow very well. I'm impressed. There's only a ...

Whoah. Twisted and fun and scary and sweet and just... whoah. I've read other works by you before, and it's really more of the best; I really love your poetry. ...

Interesting structure, but your description and constant metaphors are too confusing for the reader and it gets easily boring. You constantly change up what you are talking about without any ...

Really good. Most of the poems on this site are mostly pretty emo - reading a love poem is a nice change of pace. I would suggest a bit more ...

Intriguing, very intriguing. But my issue is that you have no definition, no emotion, and yet no mystery. It's very obvious you were required to do this poem for class ...

Omigoshers. Iloveyou. XD This is incredible! I don't think I've ever seen such great technique and emotion and rhythm, rhyme, FEELING come out of another poet on the website before!! ...

I agree. This poem, while it has a good idea and follows a good basic story, isn't very good. I would recommend working on technique, rhythm, and rhyme, as well ...

Hey. Very cute poem, very creative and imaginative. However, I have to say it's somewhat lacking in technicality. It wouldn't be too hard to fix - time-consuming, but easy. Just ...