My heart is lead
I'm sitting on my bed
My sheets are red
I wish I was dead
My eyes filled with dread
I wanted a piece of bread
Bread is my med
My feet are small children
(and that line totally works
because our artistic license is awesome)
w00t! Win.
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Um. This isn't emo. This is wannabe emo. Just saying.
Also, the last line is NOT vaildated by artistic license, it's just stupid. The line "bread is my med" makes ABSOLUTELY no sense, along with the one before it, "I want a piece of bread."
I have nothing good to say about this poem.
Adios.
-KK
but...my feet ARE small children!!
:O
Your poetry is truly heart-rending Teague. It reaches into the depths of our hearts and pulls at our emotions. The rhyming is amazingly powerful, and the last like just sets the whole thing off perfectly. Thank you so much for realising how I feel and putting it into words.
Epic win, Saint.
-Stel x
haha. i laughed. i clicked on it, thinking (maybe hoping?) that it was serious. but i was pleased to find out that it was a joke, and a funny one at that. great one.
wow....you can read my emo mind. mwhahahahahahaha.
so good
i second the person who said fifty evil emoticons go with this. totaly. very awkard rhyming-this is meant to be really awkward, am i write or am i right????
?:?
i love emticons...
ROFL. This is hilarious, especially since the reputation snoink and teague have (well, who knows if its reputation or whatever), you two have an awesome writing talent, so this was almost unexpected from you two. I love it!
My feet. Are small. Children.
You, my friend. Are a piece of work.
Two words: Bloody brilliant.
Bread pwns. ^-^
Epic. win.
Sorry Snoink & Teague, but no all-caps in titles.
That certainly was one of the most random andfunny things I've ever read.
Please keep posting.
Um...
... I thought you weren't supposed to use full caps in titles.
Anyway i thought it was... um...
---Jon---
Ha Ha Ha
This really made me get in touch with my inner emo. Seriously well done, real funny
Why are you criticising your own poem, Snoinkus?
Just edit it if it bugs you so much.
Teague
x
The word "was" should be "were" actually. *does grammar tweak*
Also, there's no punctuation except for the last line. Is this poetic effect or you being lazy?
Lmao, brilliant.
Ha ha loved it, i laughed when i read it and my mom looked at me like i was a freak
~M
This makes me emo because I realize that people have written worse stuff than this and been serious about it.
Wow.
When I first saw this title, I thought this was going to be some terrible attempt at trying to convey emotion.
And I was right... it was terribly funny.
Nice job guys!
Oh my.. That was just the funniest poem i have ever read!! Great job!! I really felt the effort in making the whole well.. most of the poem rhyme
This made my heart tremble in a fit of emo-rific glory.
Haha! this actually made me laugh.
Especially the "My feet are small children" Bit.
Delightfully random
I'm your Number One fan. I'm totally going to print this out, frame it, and hang it on my wall for the world to see. And then, I'm going to make some fan-art and send it to my favoritest authors in existence.
~ Jabber ~
I think this would have worked with fifty or so of the evil looking emoticons.
All in all, nice work. I enjoyed every excruciatingly painful rhyme.
-Jared