KnightTeen

This doesn't depress me, because even with all the darkness I am kind of getting a happy undertone, like the narrator knows that this darkness is only temporary and she ...

The ending is a really sucky cliff-hanger. Sucky in the sense that I want to read more. This was kind of short, really just a filler chapter, but I think ...

Hey Willow, thanks for the link. And wow, this was a really long chapter. BANG BANG BANG! Bang, bang, bang! BANG BANG BANG! Bang, bang, bang, bang! BANG BANG BANG! ...

Instant first impression: I loved this (There is rarely a piece that I do not love unless the author does not know the meaning of the words, "Proper grammar." The ...

This is really good. The imagery is amazing, the dialogue is good, it's just a really good piece. The only suggestion that I have for you is to remove the ...

I don't think that the ending is too cliché. It's actually a pretty good way to wrap this up. I really don't know what to say about this other than: ...

I'm starting to see a trend here.... Again, very short = very powerful. It's not just anyone who can pull this off, you know. You really have a gift with ...

This is short, but I think that it's the shortness of it that makes it powerful. The thing is, while I think it's good and powerful I'm not sure why ...

I think that this is very good. I don't know what exactly to call it, but I like it. The only thing is, I think that you should find a ...

Hello, Knight Teen of the Green Room Knights here to review. Now, I'm not trying to offend you, but I thought that this was a little cheesy. Which is good, ...

Short and sweet. I like it. I like the symbolism behind these lines. I kind of feel like the narrator has worked most of her younger (teenage to adulthood) life ...

Hey, Knight Teen of the Green Room Knights here to give you a review. I thought that this was both terrible and beautiful. I say it is terrible because the ...

Wow. This chapter was long. Eli rushed inside the bank. Holding one of the guns Sheri kept in her car in front of her. This is a case of Split-Sentence-Syndrome, ...

How much longer until this case ends? I'm already excited for the next one. Where was her phone? I'm just mentioning this because it could be a thought. I'm not ...

While this is good, the ending is very open and abrupt, and it really needs to be changed unless you intended for it to be that way. I noticed that ...