Kim

your characters are so cool, i love the way they converse with each other. your discriptions make it so easy to visualize everything. the conversations are very good. this also ...

this is awesome, i loved it. i found only a few grammar errrors. other then that perfect. The wind picked up! The shutters upon the window crashed, the wind chimes ...

i really like this, the topic is great, i can feel the emotion you are trying to write about. here are a few things to maybe help you, since this ...

I squint harder, into the fog, I rub my arms, hairs standing on end. Hairs standing on end. squint isnt a strong enough word for what you are trying to ...

now that i have read chapters 1-3, this makes more sense. i like the chat room set up. its different. i wish this chapter had more in it. you have ...

i can see your writing changing, getting more discriptive. as i am reading the chapters one by one. :) the feather intrigues me, i like how you added mystery, and ...

i really like how you started this out. and the dialogue between the two friends is very good. you should add a lttle more discription , just to give the ...

* is laughing my guts out* this was by far the most intertaining poem i have read. you took the strong emotions we all feel, and put them on paper ...

this is beautiful, i found a few errors, but you did a great job. Let's stop, listen for a hour ( try something like, "Lets stop and listen for an ...

ok, so the first paragraph pretty much grossed me out. good job. :) I knew that I had just had a delectable meal, suit for a king. Why didn’t humans ...

I to read the entire thing and enjoyed it. everything you say is true. our school system is going down the drain. students are not important anymore, just scores for ...

i found this to be very true, people come and go, some are meant to stay in your life, but most move on to live different lives. your story shows ...

your story deeply affected me, you did an awesome job discribing your feelings and making the reader feel them. although there are a few grammar errors, i think by pointing ...

This is very interesting, intriguing. i wasnt sure if it was a poem or the beginning of a story. didnt matter though, it was very good. the only thing i ...

wow, that was very strong emotion. it took me a second to figure it out, but the multiple personalities were speaking to each other. very unique. the only thing to ...