KatTrain

Hello there, wonderful poem and an interesting concept. Very relate-able (le sigh). " One wants a souvenir. " Is the line I really want to nit-pick. I dislike how the ...

Your 2nd 'stanza' (I'm not sure what to call it since you're not really using stanzas, but you get what I mean) sticks out like a sore thumb. The ambiguous ...

hell yes round rock rep-re-sent

Perfect Irony. Kudos.

Well... (take this as a compliment) I started reading it but I had to stop because it made me think of my former best friend, and it was so true.

I think the reason for this poem being... rough can be found in the poem, unfortunately. I will definitely re-write it eventually. Kyllorac, Kitty15 I don't think either of you ...

Plagiarism

double post!

I would list them all if there was space. *were :]

Plagiarism.

Favorited on youtube. absolutely beautiful.

Could you specify what grammatical mistakes please? Thanks, and thank you everyone else for your reviews also!

" he sang to you, sang in" You repeated 'sang' wayy too close together Overall it was good though, congrats

I think this was more an emotional-release poem then a artistic poem. try rewriting this when you don't feel so emotional.

I just checked out that poem. It's horrifyingly similar actually. I'm glad I hadn't read it before. Oh and, currently this piece if for 16+, Is that appropriate or could ...