Kanade

If I'm not mistaken, "self-destruction" is written with an "-". Also The last paragraph. You use "while" in the first line while cutting off the rest of the sentence, therefore ...

A nice poem! You chose the white rhyme, however, white rhyme doesn't mean that the words shouldn't resonate with each other. Try to make the overall stanza structure pattern similar. ...

Your rhyme pattern kind of bugs me. You rhyme the each last two lines but leave the first two ones without any rhyme at all. It doesn't sound poetic and ...

Actually I 100% agree with the previous reviewer. It doesn't really sound like a poem. It sounds more like your chaotic thoughts that exist in your head because you're confused. ...

The Series of Unfortunate Events. They killed it when they made the movie. Absolutely agree with that. Also, yes, Harry Potter movies.. The first two very pretty good, but then ...

I'm sorry I don't remember all the haiku requirements, know it all only in general, but I love haiku and I love your haiku. Especially the fourth one. Technically I'm ...

I think yo ucould use this music for two types of music. You could make it a rock song, wit ha semi-heavy music for it. Or you could make it ...

I like the poem. And I would like to emphasize that in this case the reason why the person died/left the author doesn't matter as much as the feelings the ...

I'm currently listening to instrumental music with the violin as the lead, and it goes really good with your poem. I can feel the wind, but the last few lines ...

Hmm.. I can relate to this poem, but the way you narrate and describe things is a bit off, especially if you're touching such a serious subject as this one. ...

Waaah, such a calm and soothing feeling it gives! I can clearly imagine everything what you're describiing in your poem. I like it, and I like the slow flow of ...

I agree with the previous poster, you should either take the word 'ancient' or just use some other.. less 'raw' word instead. I find your way to divide into lines ...

I'm sorry I'm no knowledgable poet, because I haven't studied poem construction and all those things.. only a bit at school, so I won't be able to give you a ...

Your poem actually made me scared a bit, reminded me of one scene that I witnessed not long ago. The way the.. tension's piling up with each line, makes me ...

I like the poem. It sorta is rather abstract, some lines might not make any sense to others, but just remember that they have to make sense to YOU. From ...