Kamas

I like the childish note you have in this because bullying in this context happens to children. Your words are generic but I guess its acceptable because a child can't ...

Hi there. Well, though you edited it. It still completely lacks originality, the 'I am your life, your love.' thing is too overused and has been overused since the troubadours ...

You pulled the extreme repetition off well enough here, though it did get boring after a while. But that's the problem with repetition in general, and such a huge amount ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS. The deteriorating extended metaphor you did was well presented but unoriginal. Love to Death, yup, not very original. It's just the idea itself that is ...

Very very cute Amy. :) Though I find it quite cliche with the sun-kissed petals and all that it gave me a little sigh of happiness. The rhyming was done ...

Onyx, you my dear deserve some reviews. Though I can't say I liked the poem, it was better done then I expected. You're wording makes me happy, most of the ...

Reminds me too much of the 'rock' songs of today. Yes girl overlooked boy, boy gives her a chance to redeem herself and she throws it away missing a great ...

Hi, this has a nice little beat that I might consider more for lyrics. These could possibly be lyrics too. But as Amy said, the last two stanzas put it ...

Hey there. Well, this isn't a strong poem in my books. It's cute, yes. But good consistent poetry? Not really. It's a good start though, you just need a little ...

As said above. These lines are hollow, no substance. A lot of it has to do with your threadbare wording and metaphors/similes. You use the kind of words that are ...

Hey there. Your poem is the typical teenage angst/rant one. There really isn't anything original about it, just a slightly different way of saying the exact same thing. Plus your ...

Hi there. I'm going to make this short and sweet, you don't have to take anything I say into account as I'm nearly incoherent from lack of sleep and in ...

As requested Gal. I'm going to look at this poem as a whole rather then stanzas. But I will say that this is a great poem and you deserve a ...

Though I'm not a big fan of rhyme, this was well done. Nelson Mandela is a hugely respectable man and I/m happy to see a poem about him. My biggest ...

This was nicely done, short but sweet in a way. I like the use of the imagery of the dream sinking into the pond, very well done. Tennis is right ...