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She wished she could fly away with them, away from this woman and this world that doesn’t understand her. The "doesn't" doesn't quite sound right. It's not grammatically incorrect, but ...

And yield grapes, ? That line came out of nowhere. Five boys and their manager, And brown to the rainbow, And live off mountain air, And spring morning's sweet, sweet ...

I like how you described the moon as night's single eye. That was quite poetic and apt. As Snapes already mentioned, you've got a pretty odd rhyme scheme, here. I ...

Terzanelle~! Ever since that event, I've come to love terzanelles; they're so much more variable (for lack of a better word) than villanelles. our thoughts and minds are array, This ...

What's love ? How does it feel ? Is it even real? Why are does almost every line end with a comma, even when it's inappropriate? Poems are punctuated the ...

Hey there. This isn't a bad start, but one thing these lyrics could really benefit from is proper punctuation. Right now, it's really difficult to follow what's going on. Even ...

Hello, there. You seem pretty new, so if I may suggest that you get around to reviewing other users? Doing so will help you get the points you need to ...

The first thing I noticed was the punctuation, or, more accurately, the lack/improper use of it. Secondly, you had a number of spelling and capitalization mistakes which did not make ...

The train was moving to and fro, giving me jerks now and then. The phrasing in this is a bit awkward and could be clearer. Right now, it's not clear ...

The first thing I noticed is that there's no clear separation between the author's notes and the start of the chapter. You need to fix that. forty degree Celsius Should ...

Here I am, as requested. That’s just how it is, I guess. Delete this sentence. It's redundant since you already have "That’s how it is for me, anyway." I remember ...

I liked the first stanza the best. In particular, the memory being more than a dream image was just lovely. The last line, though, seems to come out of nowhere, ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS. I see you're pretty new, but you're off to a good start with the reviewing. :D As far as your poem goes, it was ...

Usually a lack of punctuation and capitalization annoy me to no end in poetry, but I really didn't mind it with this one at all. Some things that caught my ...

There were a number of spelling and punctuation mistakes in this. I suggest you go back through and proofread more closely. With punctuation, it's sometimes helpful to rewrite the poem ...