That Funny, Tickling Feeling...
What's love,
How does it feel,
Is it even real?
I heard it hurts,
I heard that it can lie,
What should I believe now?
Looking at you I think I feel it,
I have that weird feeling when you touch me,
It used to creep me out,
But could that be it?
Is that love,
Is that what I am now feeling?
Does it hurt then?
Or is it an amazing thing?
Tell me!
I want to know everything!
What about kissing?
Is it sweet or sour?
Looking at your lips,
It makes me wonder,
What even the slightest touch would do,
I want to know more.
I have so many questions,
So bare with me please,
This is all new to me,
But please just promise me,
That you'll never leave me.
Under this full moon,
And the stars that are smiling at us;
From above,
We'll let the funny feeling take over us,
I'll hold your hand while,
You'll whisper nice things in my ear,
And like that we'll fall asleep.
Knowing that,
That feeling,
That funny, tickling feeling,
Which you call love is actually real.
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Why are does almost every line end with a comma, even when it's inappropriate? Poems are punctuated the same as prose. A good way to make sure your poem is punctuated properly is to write it out in prose format with all the appropriate punctuation before putting it back in poem form.
Wrong "bear".
I like how simple this poem was, and how you described love as "that funny, tickling feeling". I would have liked it better if you could have described exactly how it felt funny or to what extent it was ticklish, but it was an interesting enough description of love. Punctuation issues aside, this poem was pretty solid.
I don't have time to do a long review, but this is what I didn't like most:
"me" at the end of each line doesn't sound good . . . Wish I had more time.
A. S.