Kale

“You should’ve been there, son!” The chief’s voice boomed enthusiastically through the cabin . “We tracked that kid for hours from his campsite . Here, I brought you some.” How ...

A man peaked his bald head through the maroon curtains. Should be "peeked." Other than that, though, I didn't catch any errors. This was definitely an interesting start, and I ...

The entire opening scene doesn't add anything to the chapter. I suggest deleting it entirely. Without nitpicking, I can't say much else other than that the story didn't really draw ...

nun’s vale Should be veil. A vale is a valley while a veil is a cloth. she stated harshly For one thing, a statement is usually emotionally neutral/matter-of-fact. The exclamation ...

This was a really cute story. :3 There were a couple of things that caught my attention, though. Once upon a time/,/ there was a little girl who wanted to ...

Hi there. I'm not sure if you're aware, but this site has a rule that for every one work you post, you have to review two people. Just go review ...

This poem was overall very vague. There was no imagery, the verb tenses were inconsistent, and partially because of a couple misspellings that might actually be due to word confusion, ...

To be honest, it was a bit difficult to read, especially Branson. I had to think about it for a long time before I recognized the name. Since this is ...

To be honest, the title almost stopped me from reading this, but I'm glad I did. You did a great job portraying the subject in a non-glorified or cliche way. ...

Darko was pretty thorough. The rhyme scheme was forced, there was no rhythm to it, and there were several grammatical errors. For instance, you do not need to end every ...

Hello there. A little late, but I'm back as requested. Technical Bits She was so unconscious she hardly cared. If you're unconscious, you're unconscious; there's not awareness or caring of ...

Brace yourself, Dakota, for this critique will be pretty harsh. Just keep in mind that I am trying to help you and that you always have the option of discounting ...

This had me riveted, especially after Sophie finally sees her parents. :3 I'd just like to point out that Sophie should be going into shock having just been shot in ...

Not two months have I been working here as the kings' right-hand-man -- well, woman -- and people already trust me with their lives! Two months ago my life turned ...

The sun shone at its highest summit in the nude sky, shooting its infernal rays down and mercilessly baking my body through my all black attire. "Nude sky" is a ...