KailaMarie

And in the book, she was younger, and called her parents mother and father, I think. don't call then Mama and Daddy, especially if she's supposed tobe the maturity level ...

I love the ending of this. It was perfect. BUT there were a few little nitpicks about gesters and kind of how they reacted to each other like, I gulped ...

conducting a sexual relationship this sounds too formal, I think. You should just say her daughter was having sex with an 18 year old. or however you want to put ...

Overall We had moved in three days ago, yup that’s right moved right in the middle of no where, Fallston Maryland. i would make this two different sentences. "We moved ...

wow. this was really good. I can't wait to read more. crit: at first I was confused that this changed perspectives. I'm not really sure why at this point, it ...

i really like the idea of the different perspectives. I'm actually working on something that does that too. I liked how we saw Racheal's view on the kiss vs. Nate's. ...

wow. I LOVED that. there was so much feeling in it!! I'm just wondering, was the narrator jealous just because they were dancing, or did they actually do something? this ...

i was honestly surprised how much of it included inendos and sex. I was like whoa, what happened to all the virtue and such? but then the pregnancy was depressing. ...

I'm going to put all my comments in bold so you can see them better. “Mister! Mister,” the man stopped and turned his head, “Mister, are you allowed to be ...

this was really good, especially for never writing a love scene before. it was a litle cheesey but even in real life love scenes tend to be. He nibbled his ...

“Who the fuck you yelling at?” he said in her face. “I’m going to leave you.” Snow said seriously. “And where are you going to go?” “The same place were ...

this is really good. Is the twist that Sean doesn't come? cuz that'd be sad. -cries- but it was really good. I'd like to read more b/c vampire stories are ...

wow, that was so creative!! and really funny. i really laughed on like a lot of those. "It's upside-down." "Oh, man." "I can't watch it like this! Dude!" "You dumb ...

wow, that's kind of disturbing. well... really disturbing... but i'm just wondering about the title? i thought by hero, you would mean like a superhero or something. also, if people ...

I like, seriously hope that I find Jesse tomorrow at school… oh… will he like me? I’m so nervous. i know it's difficult for a guy to write form a ...