Kaila

Oh wow. This is definitely one of the best things I've read on this site so far. You've done such a great job writing it, making me feel like I'm ...

This is so good!! It's a nice blend of different kinds of trending fantasy stuff, and written well. Be careful of having too cliche of a plot, though, since these ...

Oh wow. This is good! I love how you use rhymes, but sparingly. I also love how short and simple the lines are, especially towards the end. I think that ...

Huh. Nice! This is kind of weird because its so short and you don't really explain who this guy is and who his father is... like is this a short ...

Omg the repetition!! Idk it might be just me but I love it when there's a repeating line throughout a poem like this. It conveys the message and drives it ...

Wow. This is really good too! I like the first line repeating the thing about how 'it was my fault.' I think that kind of repetition works really well for ...

Aaw :) I think this is good. Your writing is solid and easy to understand, and you express yourself very well. Are you going to continue this as a novel ...

Oh my gosh! This is so good! It's really sad but also like really well written at the same time. It's a perfect example of showing instead of telling what ...

Hi KaiRyu! Overall, I thought this was good, if not a little confusing. Here's a list of my thoughts: -The prologue set the first chapter up nicely, but you could've ...

Um, no, that's not bad!! I think it's actually good. The last part is somewhat confusing, about putting out a bottle (do you mean like write a poem about your ...

Oh wow. That's really good. Your writing style--alluding to what we know is happening, but not exactly telling it--is excellent. Also the fact that it's told from the kid's perspective ...

Wow ok... weird. That was actually pretty well written... but also fairly creepy. Also abrupt. I might've had them meet and, like, talk a little or something before the two ...

This is good! I really like the idea behind it--that we can't blame or get rid of bad things, because they emphasize the good. The part in the beginning about ...

I think this is okay! There's definitely some grammar mistakes that could be fixed and it's a little hard to follow, but all in all it's an interesting idea and ...