My Brother : he is just 6

Omg the repetition!! Idk it might be just me but I love it when there's a repeating line throughout a poem like this. It conveys the message and drives it in more. Also, I like how you use the example of how he is having his birthday soon. I wish you would talk a little more about how he is going to grow up, though, since you talk about the birthday. All in all, nice poem

So sweet, I love it!

Hi there, whatabook! plathonstone here to review (though I'm never very good at them.)
I really liked this poem! I loved how simple it was, it reminded me how simple the mind of a six year old is, I don't know if this was what you intended but if it was then well done, it works.

I don't have a younger sibling, only many older ones, but I've always wanted a younger brother or sister and this poem reminded me exactly why: it reminded me how brilliant kids are.

Overall its a really cute poem. Good use of repetition, maybe add some punctuation? But I know how hard that is when you feel your poem doesn't need it. When it comes to poetry it's really up to the poet.

Keep writing.
-plathonstone

Hi there, whatabook! plathonstone here to review (though I'm never very good at them.)
I really liked this poem! I loved how simple it was, it reminded me how simple the mind of a six year old is, I don't know if this was what you intended but if it was then well done, it works.

I don't have a younger sibling, only many older ones, but I've always wanted a younger brother or sister and this poem reminded me exactly why: it reminded me how brilliant kids are.

Overall its a really cute poem. Good use of repetition, maybe add some punctuation? But I know how hard that is when you feel your poem doesn't need it. When it comes to poetry it's really up to the poet.

Keep writing.
-plathonstone

Hi there, whatabook! plathonstone here to review (though I'm never very good at them.)
I really liked this poem! I loved how simple it was, it reminded me how simple the mind of a six year old is, I don't know if this was what you intended but if it was then well done, it works.

I don't have a younger sibling, only many older ones, but I've always wanted a younger brother or sister and this poem reminded me exactly why: it reminded me how brilliant kids are.

Overall its a really cute poem. Good use of repetition, maybe add some punctuation? But I know how hard that is when you feel your poem doesn't need it. When it comes to poetry it's really up to the poet.

Keep writing.
-plathonstone

Ok this will just be a few suggestions lets start the review!

Fist pluralize ship it was a little confusing to read.
Second the line "as he is my brother I love him as he is mine" was also a little confusing to read. Maybe reword it it a little.
Over all I really liked this poem and I can relate to it as my brother is around that age.
That is all please don't take this personally. Bye -JustGlitter

Needs a few tweaks here and there:
-ships,
-line18 could be rearranged to improve the flow.
Otherwise, great poem highlighting the many mood swings and quirks of six year olds. A joy to read.

I think you meant to say "ships" not ship. Godzilla needs to be capitalized, he may be a lizard/monster, but its still his "proper name"

"As he is my brother I love him as he is mine" could be slightly reworded so it doesn't have "as he is" twice in one sentence.

Fix little things like this, and your golden this poem is adorable, I hope you will post your brother's reaction after his birthday, your poem got me really interested in his cute little personality

I found this poem vary emotional and vary true for all six year olds. I have a cousin who is six and when she doesn't get what she wants she gets mad, but I hug her and tell her I will try to get what she want. I really liked this poem and I think you should make another one like it and maybe I'll make a poem. I really like to read your next story, poem, short story, or anything you publish.