Juniper

Hello, Melvin! Welcome to YWS! I am June, and I'm going to review this for you. Oftentimes, I say to people to disregard rhyme when writing a poem. It's a ...

Psh, Tiff, way to spring a poem on me that doesn't deserve criticsm. :P But, anywhoo, I'll have a stab and see what I can do. I like the message ...

Fishr! I don't generally do nitpicks, but if you would like me to do a more indepth review on this, leave a note in my guestbook, and I'll be more ...

Kammie, The Scarlet Ibis is of my favorite short stories. It's such a touching, heart wrenching tale, and I remember crying the first time I read it. I think you ...

Kylaaaan, I would have reviewed this much sooner if I only could find something to say on it. I feel like most of my commentary on your poetry, espcially as ...

Paaaaalantalid. I've missed your work. Your fluent style, seemingly effortless creativity. It's great to see something of yours 'round here. This is good. Perhaps it's the rhyme, but I don't ...

Haha, Sureal, that was great. It did live up to expectations. Probably went over a little, too. I don't know what I was expecting, haha, but this delivered excellently. I ...

Hey Sureal, This is great. This really heightens the tension that the characters (and audience) develop in the first part. If you had done this any other way, I'd probably ...

Hey Fireweed, June here! This was cute! Excellent flow and uppity style to this; I really enjoyed it. At first, the rhyme struck me as off (probably because I was ...

Good day, Sureal. June here. :) Good work, this. I'd like to follow along should you continue it. I didn't notice any errors in this, and don't really have the ...

Good Evening Teddiebear, I would give this poem a fair bit of restructuring and rewording. The message that you're laying out for us is good stuff, but it's a beginning. ...

Hey Logan! June here! My apologies for not getting to this sooner. I was a little worried that Marge would kill Emily, haha. Marge seems a bit bipolar, too-- it's ...

Hello, Amber! June here! Nice work here. I think you need to focus on finding a poetic voice, a voice that defines what you want to say in words other ...

Hey there, Eric, My apologies for not posting my review last night. I won't even make excuses for me, but I'm sorry. :P I like this. I like it a ...

Hey Sobe, Nice start here. I think that instead of relying on rhyme to carry your poem to us, you should try to get the message down, dear, and then ...