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Hey! I saw this in your portfolio and thought I'd check it out. I didn't expect this. This is something timeless trapped in a bottle. Maybe even wisdom. Whatever it ...

Hello! This is a good short story. I like it a lot. The relationship between the two main characters is something not often examined, so I'm glad you did it ...

Hello! I know what you mean here. I feel this story, truly and deeply. That being said, without bias, let's get into this. This poem describes how the feeling of ...

Hello! Let's get down into these stories. First one: The Forest's Song. I liked the description especially that you used in this one. Your language is often really elegant, and ...

Hello! I like this story a lot. The first few paragraphs were especially descriptive. The tone of this piece was also quite good. I almost felt like I was reading ...

Hey! Ha! I like this one. Good on your for keeping a lighthearted tone. It's a good poem. The words don't always rhyme, but I think that's okay. Small typo: ...

Hello! Oh, I like this story! The intrigue! These five children certainly didn't have a normal upbringing, did they? And now you're going to exploit that. This is a perfect ...

Hey! This poem is... something. Unfortunately, I can't really figure out what that something is. I just don't have enough information. This is supposed to be a political poem, judging ...

Hello! Cool story, let me just say. I enjoyed this. Definitely some language, but it makes it more realistic. Although the main character does say MF maybe a few too ...

Hello! I have felt this. I have definitely felt this. That quote... I feel like it is definitely understandable. Humans need to live for something. That's what most people believe, ...

Hello! Let me just say, this is definitely an interesting story. It's kind of gruesome, but if you don't mind gore it's definitely something. Something good. I felt myself wrapped ...

Hello! Beautiful poem! Amazing! I know where this is from, by the way. :D It is a beautiful original work. I love how you used lowercase letters. It makes the ...

Hello! Wow. Wow. You know technically I read this when you weren't finished with it, but I now can read it when it is completely done. And wow. It is ...

Hey! By the way, welcome to YWS! Cool opening. Can't wait to see what your story holds! Just a few suggestions (I'm sorry): *You spelled "angle" and "secrets" wrong. *In ...

Hello! This is a cool piece. I can feel tranquility with that last paragraph. Especially the sentence "Within this protective bubble the rest of the world washes away with each ...