Josie24

"Zillah gazed at the sun setting over the city it seemed so peaceful so, unaware." Your sentence feels like it should have been two. You could use that instead of ...

This portrays the pining aspect of break-ups very well, I applaud you. The first thing I notice is that some of your sentences aren't capitalized. "I almost couldn't remember why ...

Ha. Same! I always lose ideas, even when I have a pen and paper. I just forget what it was, but I have this feeling; the idea is still there, ...

Okay, to start: "To the men that broke my heart, each of you played a role in the person I am to today." I am to today doesn't make sense. ...

Ouch. Like hit me where it hurts-the feels- kinda ouch. Something similar happened to me over the holidays. I tried to catch my crush under some mistletoe and he said ...

Hahahaha. The ending. It was the best! I love the thought that he would grow attached to her as a child, that he loved and cared for her. Question 1: ...

Okay, so this is accurate. Like, scarily accurate. So, some "The urge began when everyone is young." This should read, "The urge begins when everyone is young." "The second there ...

I'm too sleep-deprived for compliments, but this was a good read. "'Wow, now that this poetic,' said Jeff..." Did you mean, now that is poetic, or now this is poetic? ...

I liked this, it was nice to read. I'm sorry; I'm too tired for excessive compliments, but that first sentence would be big if you actually knew me and cared ...

Oooh, yaasssss! Sorry, I'm composed now. To be honest, this came up on the recommended for you column on the side of the screen. I just read something long and ...

I liked your story, it was very entertaining. Your paragraphs give me anxiety. My English teacher would run around screaming, "That's NOT how it's done!" It feels like you are ...

Okay, so a lot of things have been mentioned by other people that reviewed this story, but I'll give it a go. First, I did laugh a little at the ...

Wow. I didn't expect that when I read the title. Not that that's a bad thing, I just thought it would be about a back-stabber. The genie says, "'Whatever you ...

I saw this prompt too! I was tempted to write something like this, but I never got around to it. A question- why didn't the parents come with Lucas to ...

I love this. I'm a sucker for the villains of the story to be seen in a different and better light. I have a question though. Did you give the ...