Jon

People, I need reviews badly, please with sprinkles P.S. the only reason why i bumped this post is because it went off the first page with no reviews so please ...

i agree with all of the other people in that it had a really good message and i will remember it for a long time. i really have nothing to ...

This has gone of for four months now.---- I THINK THAT YOU SHOULD TAKE AWAY THE PERIOD AND ADD ON "IT WAS JULY" TO MAKE A LONGER SENTENCE, THAT SENTENCE ...

thankyou every one for your great crits i have already started to make changes and keep following the story line! :D

please i really need comments! :D

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The Chamber The silence is suffocating. Life consigned to eternal punishment here deadens, decays, dies in a few days.-

thank you everyone for reviewing my peice and i'm glad some of you like it i will fix all of the grammer mistakes later punctuation isn't my strongest suit but ...

thank you billy, all of your comments were really great, i went back through and fixed the chapter,it sounds better :D thankyou ---Jon---

hi this is your first reply and i bet your happy to finally see a reply, now on to the critique i thought it could use more of a hook, ...

hey, i liked this poem, but it was kind of a slap in the face saying all guys only want a pretty face although most do. i really did like ...

what?! edit edit edit edit, way too much slang and chit chat! [edited by Adam_Atlantian to restore the shape of the forum.]

i enjoyed reading this poem and how it sybolized that special moments do not last forever, they "wilt" and go. other than a couple of mis word uses in the ...

this poem shouted death and despair, although i personally do not like poems like this, it was well written and it said something that made you think good job -jon-

i liked it i was a strong poem and it said something