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Hey, here are some things you can fix up and tighten: Glen dug his hands even farther into his pocket, [s]seeming to[/s] search ing for a warmth that just wasn’t ...

It was a warm summer[s]'s[/s] day unnecessary. She was sitting in her bedroom,[s] the only one she had ever slept in.[/s] I see no reason for the struck out line. ...

I stopped and stared into the mirror[s], my own eyes looking back at me. [/s] Really, dearest? What else would be looking back at you? xD. Routine… even my own ...

Hey there! Haven't seen you about before, so if you're new, welcome! The children giggle with each other, their laughter happy and carefree. Couples trail them, walking hand-in-hand, enjoying the ...

I don't actually have much to say on this, I'm just commenting so this can be brought to the attention of the appropriately knowledgeable people. I work in fiction, not ...

Whoa. So, okay - remind me again why I should bother finishing my piece? Even had I the time to edit it twice over, it wouldn't come out on top ...

Oo-er. This piece has begun to feel familiar - I do believe I've read something similar to this before, perhaps the original you posted so long ago. Could … could ...

I’m standing in my mind[s], my brain, my head.[/s] I would cut the other two, as unnecessary. Also, it flows smoother without. Wait … what? Never mind. I wonder if ...

You haz stawry?! How exciting for us all, xD. So, small points of grammar have been picked at. I wonder at this opening, though - it's good, indeed, it has ...

Yeah, I'm with you guys. Just looking at the page before this and seeing Lord of the Rings , Moby Dick and Huckleberry Finn - three spectacular novels, with Moby ...

Hey there, Ky. Been a while, eh? His jaw was slung open slightly because it was so hot and [s]so[/s] his tongue was tacky as candy. No need for the ...

Hey hey, Welcome to YWS. Before I begin, I think I should say that here we have a policy that for every story or poem you post, you should review ...

Hey there, My father has a gun. A Luger, he calls it. It's very beautiful. Silver and black. He's a policeman, he says, and a guard. He carries the gun ...

feel all lazy and guilty not getting up, but [s]I[/s] every time I try Cut the first I “It was an accident, man.” Something about this line irked me. It ...

Hello, dear Sammy-Sam. Just a few typo's I'd like to point out. would be about the same age has his old sister. as Today, would take the bus into the ...