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Okay. Thanks! :)

Does anyone know how to break these things up? I'm not sure how...

Yeah. I don't normally write like this, and it would have been more broken up if it had been completely my work but having been passed around between 6 people ...

No. I did not want it formatted the way it was when published. I'm a little new to how everything works on YWS that sometimes when I publish a new ...

In agreement, I would like to add one more thing to help that sentence flow... You could say "Of course not, the fire screams, my thumb now turning red." OR ...

Sorry! It didn't break it up like I wanted it to....

Thanks! I will do that. :)

Yeah. Normally that's what I would do. Break it up. But since there were six people writing it and no one knew what any one else was writing (we wrote ...

Thanks! :)

Thanks! :) Though I must point out that I worded the last line like that on purpose because wrong does not become good, it is transformed or distorted in the ...

I understand what you're saying. But I used the short sentences to provide different emotions in the story. The first paragraph was meant to be mystical and attention grabbing (as ...

Thanks! Artemis has always been one of my favorite greek godesses so I tend to do more research and reading on her than everyone else. :)

Thanks! I'll be sure to add that in. :)

Okay. Thanks! I'll definitely take that into consideration. :)

Thanks! Sorry to disappoint, but I hadn't intended on writing more to this since it is a short story. I tend to leave my short stories a little less descriptive ...