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Okay. I didn't have time to read the whole story so I'll give you the thoughts that I had up to where I stopped, which was when the dragons were ...

WOW!!!!!!!! This is an absolutely amazing piece of writing. I loved everything about it. There were a few words that could have been omitted but it wasn't terrible. Most likely, ...

Despite a few interesting word choices, the story was quite well written. I won't point out any of the word choices, tronks covered pretty much all of that. The only ...

To me it seems as though some of the sentences hold a beat, much like a poem. To maintain this flowing movement for your story, words must be chosen carefully ...

Good job! I loved the meaning behind this poem. I found it very insightful and full of inspiration. Thank you for sharing! I can't wait to read more of your ...

Good job! I enjoy the comments you inserted into this piece of writing by very accurately describing life and what it means. I love how you end this piece of ...

Wow. This is pretty good. Though it's short, it successfully, and entirely brings into perspective that which you describe. It is a blunt paragraph, meant only to describe how you ...

Wow. This was really good. I was very impressed with the imagination put into it. I especially loved the ending. Though after she was hit by the car it seemed ...

Interesting. I've never read anything in second person. To be honest, I didn't even know there was such thing as a second person point of view. :) All in all, ...

First of all, There was no punctuation in this poem resulting in a bit of confusion. "I'm thinking so very much I feel like my heart is made of stone ...

That was really short. Not always a bad thing, but in this particular poem it might be nice to add another stanza or continue on to explain a bit through ...

Wow. This was really good. The rhming was particularly amazing. I find it incredibly hard to rhym withe words like sacrifice and horizon, both of which you used. I didn't ...

First of all, your point of view seems to switch quite a bit at the beginning. Your first paragraph is first person, but then the next four paragraphs are third ...

I really liked the description in this story. I especially loved how you described the morning sunlight: "...the splintering glowing light of the sunrise." It has really good imagery in ...

Wow. That's really good. It's captivating and makes me curious about how it's going to turn out. I love how she compares herself with the darkness her only friend. Some ...