Jennafina

Good luck on the scholorship! I agree with Qi about the details, and am especially curious about the daughter, and also, what does the cottage look like? A few little ...

I like it! Only, one thin. Guilt clung to his sweating body, seeping through his clothing. He brushed it aside Revenge was on his side, it bound him tighter I ...

Ok, first of all, change this before someone deletes it. Quick! Do it now, because it is using the word "gay" in a derogatory sense. You're smarter than that. Our ...

I like how this one sounds. It is what lin night said. funny, yet sad. I found some lines where adding a word or punctuation mark would improve it. A ...

Helena, each time you write somthing, it gets better than ever! This is so incredebly cool! There are a lot of hidden mesenges, (I think, perhaps I'm overanalizing) and I ...

Ok, I'm back. As usual, I love it, but found a few things. While other people their age were out doing senseless things like drinking or partying to relieve themselves ...

I like it, and I agree with Ashley that you should be a your. Thats probably just a typo, though. It feels a little random, and I can't decide wether ...

Lol, that's cute, in the short-little-humerous-poem-just-for-fun sense. I love the rhyiming. And quid is such a fun word. I'm glad you put that in there. Quid Quid Quid Quid Quid.. ...

Ok. I'm a lousy critiquer, but I will do my best. :) Do You See? When you look into the mirror, on this special day, won’t you please tell me, ...

It's a little to short for me to get deeply engrossed in it, but I like it all the same. The rhyiming is extremely well done, and doesn't detract from ...

I like the sound of this poem. The pace is good too, and I love all the images. One thing. Now I'm in a physc ward, For the depression you ...

Hmmm. Interesting... I'm not that goot at critiquing things, but I need my parctice.. I hope you don't mind. My banana My banana is not yellow. It is grey, shrivelled ...

I really liked this too! Its one of those quietly pretty poems that arn't very memorable but really flow well. :) I love all the images. Especally the last one ...

Ack! More Orks!!! hehe.. Just kidding. I love the rhyming. They seem so natural, like the ones in lord of the rings when theyre all singing songs. Very epic. :)

Wow! Nice job! Some parts seem a wee bit forced, but apart from that, I really like it. Especially this. We had lost yet another game to Nature, who had ...